Its the first time i do something like this, so I would appreciate some feedback. Hope you like it
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Purging Fields
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Hector Cervantes
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Meatshield
Posted 18 November 2011 - 01:55 AM
Here's the story I wrote for my character, Captain Hector Cervantes.
Its the first time i do something like this, so I would appreciate some feedback. Hope you like it
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Its the first time i do something like this, so I would appreciate some feedback. Hope you like it
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Posted 18 November 2011 - 08:05 AM
there are a couple of spelling mistakes such as: "I would’ve shared the same faith, were I not sleeping at the village" i think you meant fate
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Posted 18 November 2011 - 11:11 AM
yes, I did. Thank's 
My english id a bit rusty, it's been a while since I needed to use it regularly
My english id a bit rusty, it's been a while since I needed to use it regularly
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Posted 18 November 2011 - 11:24 AM
Anyway, what did you think of it besides that?
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Posted 18 November 2011 - 12:03 PM
how kind of you:P
Thanks
Thanks
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Posted 18 November 2011 - 03:03 PM
Great story bro! Very well written, especially if English isn't your language. Definetly inspired me to write my own.
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Posted 18 November 2011 - 11:11 PM
A very enjoyable read, Thankyou Hector for sharing it.
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